Thursday, August 18, 2011

low rumble


the straw wrapper
a question mark

by the
storm drain

This one is a little longer than I usually like -- especially that middle bit -- but I haven't figured out a way to cut or reword it that works for me yet. Maybe this one will remain a case where I stretch my own rules or inclinations and leave it at that.

It's also pretty straightforwardly descriptive, without the ambiguity I talked about in an earlier entry at the start of this blog. Ah well, a different kind of haiku for a different image and impression. There's room for the ambiguous and room for the descriptive -- I just don't want to get lazy or boring and always take the straightforward route...

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